First text is written in informal language and the second text is written in formal language.
"Hi, long time no see. I was kinda wondering if you need any more personnel for this summer? You see, I need a summer job and since I did my APU* at your company 2 months ago I thought I should ask you before I go all out checking with every company in town! :))) Anyway I hope you answer me asap.
//// Victor"
"Dear Mrs. Anderson
My name is Victor Borgfors and I had my APU* take place at your company two months ago. I have since then finished school and have my mind set on studying International Relations at the University of Salisbury this autumn. However I have found myself in a intolerable economic situation and thus looking for a summer job. I sincerely hope we can agree that my stay at your company was beneficial for both parties, and that your impression of my performance was positive.
Having said that, I will attach my CV to this mail and bid you to write back when you have come to a conclusion regarding the situation of summer jobs at your company. With that said I bid you a continued pleasant week.
Sincerely,
Victor Borgfors"
*APU is a Swedish acronym for "Arbetsplatsbelagd Utbildning" which is something that is mandatory for students at many vocationally-oriented programs at upper secondary school, such as the industry programme or the business and service programme.
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Good job! These letters really demonstrate the difference between formal and informal writing.
SvaraRaderaFormal letter, a couple of things: "...I did my APU at your company..." Telling a prospective employer that you apply for the job because you are desperate for money seems a little out of place? "... and I am thus looking for" ("I have" does not work as subject+auxiliary for the second part of the sentence). "Having said that" and "with that said" - cut one or preferably both. "when you have a clear picture of the staffing situation at your company this summer..." or something.
Well done Victor!
Anna